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In distant lands, where mortal man’s
coarse footsteps seldom fall,
there spreads the magic forest, far and wide.
Deep within stands a keep of massive stone,
home to a fairy who had been banished there
by jealous sisters; they placed a curse
upon her, which was, that any male who saw
the imprisoned fairy would fall in love with her.
But should he ask her for her name, the lad
would instantly be transformed into a dog
that would follow her at every step.
A dozen canines were at her feet, groveling,
whining, whimpering pitifully for affection.
Let it be known--this man, too,
needed to know her name, and now he
answers to “Fido” when she calls.

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I like your fairy tale, Jerry. No frogs this time. Far eastern forests or maybe in Britain? There is a story about Catherine and Malcolm, but it doesn't mention dogs, that's why I think maybe Russia.
Sounds as if it's your personal experience, do you have a dog called "Fido"? And who is he, you? That would make N somebody else, else you have a double.
Enjoyed a lot.

"The very existence of libraries affords the best evidence that we may yet have hope for the future of man." T.S. Eliot, from The Wasteland.

no, not England or Russia, but Germany, the land of Hansel and Gretel, with its rich forests and quaint villages that set the background for my fairytale. Long ago, while stationed in Germany, I had occasion to visit the Black Forest. It left an impression on me. "Fido" used to be a common name for dogs. Now it's "Spots," lol. Abraham Lincoln had a dog by the name Fido. "He" is just a figment of my imagination; a morsel of undigested beef I had for dinner. Thanks for reading, Gracy.

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Is that the diminutive of fidelity? [Loyal] I think that the story might or should be Roman. The title fits and the language was good, it flowed well from beginning to end. I usually find that there is some kind of moral to a story of this nature. I didn't find one and would be interested if I am missing something. ~ Geezer.

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about the dog's name--yes it means "fidelita" in Latin or fidelity in English. I guess there is a moral to the story: Don't go off straying in the woods; some fairies collect men's heart like I collect stamps, (which I do, from all over the world.) Woof!
Thank you, JerryK

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cute I had to laugh at this Fido indeed

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

thank you, Woof, Woof!

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