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season of death
short rations
empty silent woods
scant of even sunlight

Lest one stops
sits still
and listens

A silent crow flies in clear sky
with lightly whispering wings
the winds in pine tree quietly sighs
a far distant church bell rings

A rustling in the leaves betrays
a nearby scuttling chipmunk
among the duff of browns and grays
air currents carry whiff of skunk

in tree tops, acrobats of gray
with bushy tails cavort and jump
making limbs rattle and sway
then eating acorns on an old stump

Next : out of place hammering
of a large pileated wood pecker
while on a dead tree searching
for a termite double- decker

A bright blue jaybird giving hell
to a coyote seeking food
bats in hollow tree beside a well
awaiting night, they hang and brood

Why you might even see a deer
if you are really lucky
as nuthatches flit both far and near
with their tails all stiff and plucky

So the empty winter time
not so barren after all..............

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thanks for catching that error. As to natural way of writing, it has turned me into a contortionist lol................stan

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Niiiice! (Not bad for an old guy rhymer!)


p.s. sorry, couldn't help myself.

Even old fat bald codgers can surprise you every once in a while, crone lol..................scribbler

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if you permit me Rise!
in winter
one rarely sees a dawn ,
that's how we appreciate it
when it,
the sun ,
does in spring rise.
was my wording
a dawning surprise.?
i mean
sunrise .


good to hear from you. I just finished watching 5 consecutive winter sunrises from a below freezing deer stand.Such happenings are what enables me to write of them with a touch of accuracy lol..............scribbler

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I AM below freezing

now its nearly minus 12

will be minus 35

this Jan
which is normal and snows
the sun can't see


where do you live, Antarctica ? I think it's cold here at 19 Stay close to the fire,lest freezing you desire. if you can't feel feet and nose, rest assured that they are froze..................scribbler

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love this one mate, certainly brightened my winters day, we have birds in our garden throughout the winter here in England and put birdfood out for them daily. Tim

I am glad you enjoyed this experiment in mixed forms................scribbler

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