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Einstiein

I had a friend called Einstein
He was such a sweet, sweet thing
Round with trumpet like spouts
And a very special grin

I couldn’t tell whether he had eyes
and a mouth I couldn’t say
But every night he’d say hello
In his own very special way

I remember well this particular night
As I wasn’t quite myself
I’d drunk a bottle of whiskey
That I found upon my shelf

I don’t know why I did it
Usually I drink tea
But this night wasn’t normal
And now you all will see

Einstein he was crying
No tears but I could tell
His voice that was like Kevin’s
Was now more like a girl

He claimed he would be leaving
a bad man had spoken to the world
Disinfectant would cure the virus
Einstein really did feel cursed

I tried to reassure my friend
Without him I’d feel worse
We’d had some times together
He really was diverse

Einstein will be leaving
No longer he’ll be here
And I myself be grieving
To lose a friend so dear

The pentagon has spoken
Einstein’s fate is in the bag
So I say good bye to Einstein
But boy do I feel mad

Aliens arriving,
To take my dear friend home
How do we all know this?
Spaceship bumped into a drone

We know this virus, global
But I promise to you this
Don’t drink disinfectant,
You’re better off with gin...

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
wouldnt it be nice to think any virus could be friendly but even more fun to have aliens come down to save the day. i have no political interest just a bit of fun. reference to kevin "the voice of a minion"
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Comments

Hello, Teddy,
It would be nice if viruses were friendly, or if at least we weren't quite so horrified by them. Your poem offers a simple spin on this virus - to use intelligent, common sense. I very much like the idea of aliens in your poem.
Thank you,
L

thank you. i am delighted you have enjoyed this i guess as the world has gone mad so has my imagination.

Thank you...Teddy

author comment

interesting write as said before a new twist. you stared to lose the rhyme a bit but came right back

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

I think you are right, it's the second last stanza
if you have any ideas please let me in, i was even wondering if simply taking "the" after spaceship away may keep it sweet but i will wait for some help. anyway its going to be fun finding alternatives hopefully with some tips

Thank you...Teddy

author comment

Is good enough, so that the near rhyme seems as though it is perfect rhyme. I enjoyed this very much. I am a firm believer that there are aliens out there that are looking at us in wonderment; thinking that we are so full of contradiction, but promise... Yes, we must be a great puzzle to the Vulcans, who are the most logical beings in the galaxy. Thanks for feeding my hopes. ~ Geezer.
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