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Ego~Narssistic {May 2021 CONTEST}
Entwine two cobras
Ego and narcissist
which one would devour who
the two are almost
but not really equal
Dr Jekyll or Mr Hyde
I know a dearest
one behind the other
everyday hide
then it made me decide
to alter my ego to where only narcissists go
I laid besides a swimming pool
not accepting I couldn’t swim
then stripped to birthday suit
smelt me and confided
the beauty that I saw
never ever existed
let me ride
I turned over and into the water
no more ego nor even a shadow
winters snow did freeze
perhaps another birth may be
but never anyone like me
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Race_9togo
Sat, 2021-05-22 01:36
Hey Lovedly,
No critique...just everything I expect from a poet like you: simple in structure, layered with meaning and vision, powerful in timelessness.
Respectfully, Race
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lovedly
Mon, 2021-05-24 21:23
How do I thank thee
tell me
Geezer
Sat, 2021-05-22 07:04
That's my man...
lovedly! I guess you aren't about to give up the title just yet! ~ Geez.
.
It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?
lovedly
Sat, 2021-05-22 10:33
The me in me speaks
to those
who consider me as
mine
lol Gee yes its still EGO-ME
Thanks
scribbler
Mon, 2021-05-24 21:13
yes
we are all different and that's a good thing. wouldn't it be boring if we were otherwise?
lovedly
Mon, 2021-05-24 21:21
thanx
scribbler