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Eat beans with me
My brother likes beans a lot
Sometime in a porridge mixed
With plantain, potato and yam
I like bean cake called Akara
Beans are eaten in many ways
Blended with season and spices
Boiled in bowls, my moi moi
So served with rice and stew
Cook beans, make it all soft
Add onions, pepper and leaves
Cray fish, dry fish and oil
With salt to taste, let it cool
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Inspired by an article in an old manuscript, It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics
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scribbler
Sat, 2012-02-25 22:05
Hi T rex
Unfortunatly the cost of eating beans is not just the purchase price lol. But I also like a good pot of slow cooked mixed beans and corn bread. I like your vivid description of an every day meal...........stan
t. reflexion
Mon, 2012-02-27 23:44
A tribute to bean...
inspired by workshop on more meters, thanks to workshop leader, best wishes.
tr
A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
author commentt. reflexion
Mon, 2012-02-27 23:48
Interesting...
Beans with dog meat, I wonder how it will taste, thank you for the comments and the insight, best wishes.
tr
A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
author commentCandlewitch
Tue, 2012-02-28 11:48
Dear t.r
My husband loves baked beans. He makes them himself. I think the molases that go into them is his secret ingredient! LOL, secrets's out now.
I read your interview in the newsletter. You are a very interesting person.
always, Cat
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t. reflexion
Wed, 2012-02-29 23:54
Oh! The interview...
I did not have much to talk about, I only dream of being a great poet one day, or did I present myself as funny and silly? Anyway, I appreciate your interest, thanks and best wishes.
tr
A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2012-03-01 12:19
Dear t.r.
I think we all dream of being great at our art, I know I do :) You didn't come off as being a bit silly. I enjoyed reading about you.
always, Cat
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