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Easy Is Hard To Do

I could really get into you
Easily love you even
But there are differences and
Friends can be cruel.

I could be your best friend
I could say it; just fill your ears
But with friendship comes trust
And you trust to easily

I could marry you
Live and thrive between the walls
But with love comes devotion
And you love to easily

I will not say goodbye
It would be the nice thing to do
But with nice, comes your smile
And I cry to easily

By: K. Mulroney

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Please don't tell me to remove the "And" at the beginning of each last line in stanzas 2,3 and 4. They are meant to be there. All other suggestions are welcome. Thanks all.
Editing stage: 

Comments

It shows that the writer has compassion for the other person in a relationship, but can't force themselves to be sorry enough to give it up, because they know they aren't ready to commit as strongly as the other.
One criticism, there is one O in as, I did this [to] you, and two O's in me, [too].
~ Geezer.
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Thank you. Glad you saw what this was. And I fixed the problem you mentioned. Thanks so much!

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

author comment

I found that one should as far as possible avoid
and - but- if -so
these words add no beauty to poetry
yet appear as stones
not alongside the road
but right in the middle

Hope you will take care
I am grateful to you for all your guidance and time
Looking forwards to more interactions
I visited Illinois three times
wish I had then known you
I have now become your fan
two unique ones

Thank you. I see what you are saying. I purposely constructed this poem this way, like the word AND in front of the last line last three stanzas. Writing poetry for me is like assuming the characters body and brain, thoughts, feelings. It’s what an actor has to do in a movie. I want to become that person or feeling. I do not write literal. I know it bothers some writers. However, poetry is not English Comp. Some reviewers want you to write like it’s an essay. I gotta wonder what Edgar Allen Poe would have said with some of the reviews I have read. Lol!

Thank you so much for the great review and yes, I would have loved to know you when you were here in a Illinois. It’s too damn cold here to many of the year, but I can’t change that only where I hang a hat!

Keep writing my friend!

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

author comment

like jess says
do not use ellipses===(.............)
as a non poet
I am trying to pick up the nuances of poetry
I have by now composed over 15000 across the Internet

some are gems
diamonds
mostly Garbage

as you read me more you will come to know more or abhor
I am off the cuff poet
others read and edit
Thanks to Neo
@80ish I still learn
man is always learning
till he vanishes
lol

Amen!!

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

author comment
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