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Early Monday Morning

I open my eyes slightly,
as the morning scurries about
gaining purchase in all of my senses
First the blatant light, then the chill
clinging to the edges of the night before

The colors and shapes play about me,
though I’m not yet fully awake
I hear your breath behind the quiet
before the world stirs to life

My gentle return to the waking world shattered,
LIKE A NEEDLE
SCRATCHING ACROSS
A RECORD!!!
by the press of a cold and wet canine nose
exploring deep in my ear! I sleepily push it away
over to her side of the bed, hoping the pup
will linger there until the alarm goes off, at least!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Life with dogs, right?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

dogs are dependent souls. a puppy is in his developmental phase...a bundle of loving. I have cats, because Steve and dogs are not a good fit. Cats are independent and demanding. but they will reward you with purring...don't forget, everything is on THEIR terms, lol. be grateful for the puppy.

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Very grateful for our new guy Cat! Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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know little about boundaries and think that when they are awake, the rest of the world should be too!
I think that maybe you didn't get to rest until the alarm went off. The title is okay, but then again, it isn't for an earth-moving epic. The pace is fine, it moves easily. I love the theme, because I love dogs and it flows well from beginning to end. ~ Geezer.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

So true Geez! We love this little trouble maker, and will miss his puppy-ness!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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