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Dusk to Dawn

When Sun bids adieu
the greens wave in gratitude
for keeping their grins

At night they enact their role
wiping some carbon footprints

Moon glides merrily
a ballet on starlit stage
the crickets applaud

Floral tributes greet at dawn
in rose buds speckled with gems

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Damn, you sure writes better than me. lol. You already know this is good.Keep it up, man.

Alid

Thanks for your encouraging comment...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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This looks like a renga to me. I try doing it on my own once and Barbara told me that it should be created by more than one poet instead.

Alid

You are right. That is why I haven't called it a Renga or a Tanka.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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b e a u t i f u l
raj ur wonder fullllll

is this all the effect of the ocean
in the middle of the night you go there
alone >>>
I doubt it
but good you do
that's why such imagery comes to you

loved

Thanks for the visit and a very generous comment....

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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This write gives me many words that flow with the setting of the Sun until it rises again in dews rainbows dawn,.
Keep them coming, yours, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks for the visit and the read. Glad to know it has inspired you to take it further...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i like the natural sense in this piece

Thanks Emeka for your visit and comment.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i like the natural sense in this piece

This is just lovely I cant think of anything to offer but my congratulations on a cracker write

kudos my friend...

much love and hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thanks for the visit and the read....good to know you liked it..nice to see you back..

much love n hugz...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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