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Dungeon of Wisdom

shuttered exits
only exist in nightmares

head-high weeds are sprouts
to a fence of knowledge

the problem with real
is its reliance on reality

the young and the new
are the secrets of entryism

you aren't ill even if you're sick
until you begin to lose confidence

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Free verse
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Welcome to Neopoet! A great first submission. I can't pick a favorite couplet or image. This poem gives readers a lot to think about. It reminds me of the aphorism "fake it 'til you make it". I suffer mental and physical illness and there is only so much that "faking it" can do for me, so that phrase always rubbed me the wrong way. The ending of the poem definitely takes a unique stance on that "fake it 'til you make it" mindset.

Looking forward to more of your writing. Maybe the next one will have something I can offer feedback on! It's not usual of me to not be able to find something to suggest.

Thanks for sharing,
Kelsey

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Swamp-witch,
Thank you so much.

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