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DUDE NOW I'm Seventeen

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2020-09-10 22:10

I think
love only flows
through one's eyes
when one is a day short of seventeen

but shy
then hopes beyond the skies lie

as in dreams above to heavens fly
then in hopes we lie
at seventeen oh my

lordly of love come along

I am now off seventeen
so now I to you belong
oooooo do come along..

you may be no more
but a poet of love we all adore
in heaven now all the more

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Thanks for the Inspiration O ONCE LOVELY LOVE POET
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Fri, 2020-09-11 08:54

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the age of consent is seventeen in your country? ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Fri, 2020-09-11 10:46

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in BF AND GF era
mg is just a formality

post arr of kids

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Viviana Smith

Fri, 2020-09-11 11:00

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Are you really 17? What is so good about being 17? Im happy being 14. I don't want to be or get any older.
Lol

Vivi
(Love hanging with my family of poets)

lovedly

Fri, 2020-09-11 14:08

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I'm old enough to be your granpa
but I compose poetry still
in order to love of life instill
in everyone one who reads me
he or she

will U also kid
keep going you have a long way
I am on the edge of time
as time slips
I may also

then remember
poetry is imagery
just emotionary
we all come to go
we don't come
nor go
of our own
unless ah now you also know
lol
keep evolving poetry often is
like problems solving

so straighten your avatar
o youngly
poetess
all will you
Bless

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Viviana Smith

Sat, 2020-09-12 21:14

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this is so cute and has made my day

Vivi
(Love hanging with my family of poets)

lovedly

Sat, 2020-09-12 21:39

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then cutely smile and update
be happy life is not very simple these days
CORONA GRATES

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Geezer

Fri, 2020-09-11 12:30

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be fourteen as long as you can. Being a grown-up like lovedly, [going into his second-childhood at eighty], is not all it's cracked up to be. We do try to be child-like in some respects and have some fun though. Glad to see you can laugh. ~ Geez.
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Teddy15

Fri, 2020-09-11 12:41

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i really love this it's got an amazing serenade to it, i actually did have my first true love at the age of 17, man i still think of him today, he was the best and worst of my memories, what is was to be 17? makes me remember so much this poem. Thank you.
nostalgia!

isn't it true though when we are young, we want to be older?

Thank you...Teddy

lovedly

Fri, 2020-09-11 15:29

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don't ask me
a desire to be youngly
@80
not beyond 16
help me
will ye
Glee
sorry an extra
L

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Geezer

Fri, 2020-09-11 17:58

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that there is much help for you lovedly. LoL.

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lovedly

Fri, 2020-09-11 19:02

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Don't snore
ask for more

our times up /
not down

but this 17 one is
like an appetizer
for young ones
you r out lol

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