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The Drunk
I lean on the edge of here and there
A poet blessed with a cloud of despair
I am inspired
Can I build a house?
Will it be?
Do I require 70%
Enough, I despise myself
My greedy hands
Review Request (Direction):
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2019-01-07 11:41
Good. To the point.
Is the number 70% of particular significance?
Generally it is a good idea to write numbers 'seventy per cent' unless there is a specific reason for doing so.
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cheers,
Jess
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