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Drugs and alcohol

I go to the store to get some Mountain Dew
Mom asks me if I’m high and i tell her I am through
But my Mountain Dew is ‘special’
And my drugs are confidential
And i don't want them to know the truth…
About my torn tattoos
That left a bruise
About my deep ass scares
I almost crashed my car,
I wasn’t that sober.
They ask me “why do you drink your only 13,
You shouldn’t drink you have a family,
But I’m a broken serial code
Only 4 numbers long, they’re unknown
And i'll bring to school my lean
And hope i go unseen.
And i'll hope the cops won't track me down
Take my drugs and leave this town
And my mountain dew is empty
And my heart it needs assembly
Cause these drugs and alcohol
And the style here is trendy
Oh just look it's so tempting
Yes, The drugs and alcohol.

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For anyone who struggles with any type of addiction, I know how you feel. I may not know your story but you are not alone.
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