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DROUGHT AND REPRIEVE (new form) *****please see author notes

Too little rain for way too long,
ground so dry that it's just wrong.
Crops of dead from moisture's dearth.
What led to this drought's arid birth?

I've never seen it near this dry,
all the clouds have just passed by.
What used to be broad roiling rivers
reduced to narrow water slivers.

Cattle gone 'cause pasture's dead.
There's naught to raise up in their stead.
Many brooks are now bone dry,
trees now wilt prepared to die.

Near reservoir now just a puddle
where fish,frogs and turtles huddle.
I wonder just what they might think
of being driven to their brink.

Everywhere I chance to peer
desiccated, dust , dry and sere.
for six years.
A reprieve?

Forecast for tropical storm
anxious tension building
...as approach grows more certain

Clouds approach
arrive
thicken
darken

A warm damp breeze
bearing the first tiny drops
......of rain

Slowly increasing in volume
becoming torrents
Earth and all rejoice in the return of mud
ground sucking down water
like beer at a frat party

First trickles in dry stream beds
becoming heavier
muddier
as now normal flow become
long awaited flood

The drought breaker

Three blessed days duration
liquid life standing in fields

The gradual tapering off
as spent storm moves on
revealing:
...miraculous tiny green sprouts
....full lakes and water ways
.....invigorated foliage
.....amphibians' emergence
and the return of
Hope

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This was written before the site crashed shortly after I came here. I post it now to show the seed of what later became "Morphing" poetry. So although listed as a shop poem now, it's actually just another sample of the new form, indeed, the First sample. Sometimes it's easier to Show how a thing can be done than to explain it. I hope this helps everybody in figuring out how the form can be used in order to enhance a poem
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If the idea of Morphing came and this was born then it is a great idea.
This poem with its changes to the lives of many people reads well and is a good story.
I look forward to the workshop and the varied stories we will hear, this form gives a good place to show two sides of a feeling or thought, then the action, they will all have their own style.
Yours Ian.T

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the time I originally posted this I had no thought of using it as a basis for a new form of poetry. But you can never tell where a poem might lead lol..........stan

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I live in California where we're in the worst drought in history, so this resonates with me.

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Just goes to show how art can imitate life. When this was written the south east was in its final year of a 6 year drought. .............stan

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I think I understand a bit what you are getting. Let me think it over and check on the other's contributions to reconfirm before I post mine, sir,

Alid

Just let me know for sure whether you want to enroll and then wait for my PM telling you it's your turn to post.......stan

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Count me in.

Alid

are in. Be sure to read the workshop thread so you will be current.........stan

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Knowing that this one is to be an example of Morphing poem, after going through the first few verses I could anticipate where the poem was leading to. The transition is neat and consistent with the theme. Thanks for posting this which now brings more clarity about morphing....

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

At the time this was written I had not even thought of it in terms of being something new. Perhaps that is true of all new things lol. I'm glad that it has helped you better understand the form.........stan

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The morphing here. Am I using the word "morph" right?
Anyways, the changes here sound so natural.

What is the use of the ellipsis in the last stanza? Just curious, if you don't mind it.

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Me start with the ellipses. When originally written this poem also used variations in actual line placement which I call form punctuation. The variation involved off setting the beginning of the lines in a variable manner as an additional means of punctuating change. But since the site crash I can't get things to post that way without using Something to fill in the gap at the start of each line which I want to off set. So I use elipses to gain the offset. As originally written, this poem had a lot more offsets which started when the form change started......Whew! lol.

As to use of morph and morphing you have it right. It is the same as the use of change and changing would be...........stan

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