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Drink

Drink
Otherwise known as an invitation to divulge secrets.

Secrets of your heart and your mind that may or may not be exposed, depending on the smile when your first walk in.

Drink
An offer to exchange thoughts

Thoughts that perk your mind to an accelerated pace, one that doesn’t stop until told too.

Drink
The basis of life.

Life that is ours to share, ours to grow, to fail, to feel… and to wonder, “what could possibly be better”.

Drink
Will you grab a drink with me?

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Free verse
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i think the poem was good. i like the idea and drink as a theme and title..having a drink of good thought share can be nice when with friends

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thanks for the feedback.

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I love your profile-
"Think, or reflect, or sync up to the thoughts outweighing everything else in the room.
This is me. Now you know."
Though we would really like to know more about what poetry you read and like, it helps with suggestions.

The poem. Drink is the basis of life? My irony meter is on the blink, it's telling me there must be some in a poem about the liver bullet and mind macerater.

cheers,
Jess
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that [drink is symbolic not literal] here. Or if it is... that it could be anything, not necessarily alcohol? ~ Geezer.
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