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Dressed

The thrill of the chase
satin and lace

The ecstasy of being caught
wedding dress sought

The miracle of first born
christening gown, already worn

The sadness of divorce
dressed for hearse

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Structured: Western
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments

however it reads a bit like a list.

Usually I suggest less words not more, this could benefit from conjunctions.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

thanks x

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