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Dressed

Submitted by sueb on Tue, 2013-02-05 14:23

The thrill of the chase
satin and lace

The ecstasy of being caught
wedding dress sought

The miracle of first born
christening gown, already worn

The sadness of divorce
dressed for hearse

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Structured: Western

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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

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Wed, 2013-02-27 00:50

however it reads a bit like a list.

Usually I suggest less words not more, this could benefit from conjunctions.

cheers,
Jess
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Wed, 2013-02-27 08:45

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