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Dreams

Submitted by loved on Tue, 2012-04-17 15:59

The minds manifest has so many weights
one such corner has the best enclave
to reminisce for the events gone by
yet imagine ones ahead
in the creation of one’s mind
bold, stout and fervent
the dreams one gets are heaven sent,
if there be one
otherwise dreams are the seeds of rejuvenation
a man can only create and procreate
with visual injection
of thoughts deeds and action
which manifest from sheer virtual imagination
the impossible is a deterrent,
the positivity is cornered
in the dreams manifests,
hence we explore
to the far folds of unknown destinations
without dreams life would be naught
mere virtual imagination

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Eduardo Cruz

Tue, 2012-04-17 16:04

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For me this is one of your best, coherent, fasinating and well constructed.
Bravo to you, I think that you have been listening and reading. I am impressed.

Eddie
...

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

loved

Tue, 2012-04-17 16:20

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thanks for coming by
after a long time
thanks you are wonderful

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loved

Tue, 2012-04-17 22:28

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cruz

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loved

Wed, 2012-04-18 13:07

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you may like to comment
some one
thanks in advance,...

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2012-04-18 13:35

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I beleive this is one of your best poems to date! It knocked me right outta my socks!!!

a man can only create and procreate
with visual injection
of thoughts deeds and action
which manifest from sheer imagination
the impossible is a deterrent,
the positivity is cornered
in the dreams manifests,

always, Cat

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loved

Wed, 2012-04-18 14:38

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how I can write best poetry
without any substantial knowledge

then I feel as beauty lies
in the eyes of a beholder

twas similar perhaps beauty poetic

must lie in the minds eye
of poets like you.

thank you Cat
you are graceful

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weirdelf

Wed, 2012-04-18 23:07

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You make me wait, you bugger!
This is intelligent, thoughtful and beautifully written.

One tiny suggestion-
sheer virtual imagination
mere virtual imagination

The slight change of meaning would enhance the difference between random dreaming and active creativity implied in the poem.

cheers,
Jess
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loved

Thu, 2012-04-19 02:42

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it's my pleasure
to accept wisdom ..
shall do
thanks to you..

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Roscoe Lane

Thu, 2012-04-19 03:01

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Nice poem but what about nightmares are they not also dreams LOL, Sorry just having fun. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

loved

Thu, 2012-04-19 10:20

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an aspect which slipped my sight ,
as i drop dead ,
at the drop of a hat ,
when tired flat ....
so night mares
I DON'T SEE
but in dreams
they can monster anyone
including me....
next dream i shall concentrate
at Roscoe's link
and update...

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weirdelf

Thu, 2012-08-30 16:46

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and some of the best of my praise
I thank you for your generosity of spirit
and name you poet, one who has worked at it.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

loved

Thu, 2012-08-30 20:56

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Blessings
poet /bard

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