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Dream of Me Tonight ( edit Gee)

Just dream of me tonight
Just before you sleep
send a missed call.

Then I shall leave my shell
My soul within you
shall go through your nostrils
into your heart

There it will rattle for a while
Believe me it’s me

Two souls will entwine
yours and mine
‘twill rain but be happy
the night has been born
with two souls energised as one

The whole night we shall blow and glow
sounds of music will come soft and slow

As the morning beckons
I shall go back to my lifeless jacket
lest all think
I am no more
Call the doc and bury me
be safer burn
So before dawn must return

Will you remember
the night we two only owned
‘twas magnificent
yes for us two

Wake up the dawn has come
we have returned to our form
Haven’t you yet

I will come softly and quietly go
warm you up and happiness shall flow
then alone all will guess
we were two together
once again

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Free verse
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Comments

should let go of a few of those "and no one shall know." Too bad that she doesn't see you for the "young stud" you most obviously are. She would be a lot quicker to answer you. ~ Geezer.
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lol Gee
removed
U KNOW GO C

looks more soulful than
studded one

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much better now! I agree, much more soulful! Nice job. ~ Gee.
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Gee you

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Shucks! ~ Gee.

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