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Dream Man

When you think of a dream person
you probably thought of a good dream,
and more importantly a good person.
well, unfortunately not this guy. I don't
know who he is but in every nightmare I
have he appears. He may even just be in
the background but either way, he's there.

I'm terrified just talking about him. He is tall,
pale, has brown eyes, black hair, and is almost
always holding a gun. Well, he's only holding a
gun in his house. I have history with him, and
not the good kind. I know that I know him from
somewhere but I don't know where. Maybe he
is a self conscious representation of my depression,
I can ever run from him, and I live with him in
my dreams. I would rather not know him but I'm
afraid that if I didn't know him that he could make
thing scarier.

His house is turquois and broken down, and half
empty. Guns all across the walls and the main room
is the kitchen. He terrifies me but I think that on
the inside he is also terrified. He is crazy, so
is he tormented by his past? All the people
reminding him that he has a savior mental disorder?
Maybe he was held in an asylum. I'll be sure to ask
him next time I see him in my dreams.

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Last few words: 
This isn't what i normally write, i was just recetly haveing more nightmares than usual and started to notice that the same guy was always there. I've always been very interested in dreams and the science behind them, what they mean, so i was just drawn to write this about the man. It was a quick, last minute write so I'm sorry it's not that good.
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Comments

Dreams and nightmares... almost always a good subject because they usually contain intense emotion as well as imagery........stan

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