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dream dreamers

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2017-01-19 21:40

Dream all Lovers and Friends

Your poetry is so dreamy
When do you
come out from dreams

I rarely get one long dream
so don't worry
I love dreaming too
no hurry keep dreaming
it makes life happy

All those who do dream
go beyond a river’s stream
all others keep lying
in hopes

Some beautiful butterflies,
would come flying
and
take them away to another dreamland
they too wonder
what it would be

So keep dreaming like me
I don't sleep
but only dream

Some ask why do you scream
I say
I only do when
I’m in my happy moody dream
else I snore
all get bored
they ask someone to get me stored

In the basement down floors
so I tell them worry not
I shall not snore
but let me dream
for a few hours more
yes much more

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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alidzain

Sun, 2017-01-22 09:57

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Good one.

Alid

lovedly

Sat, 2017-02-04 07:58

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GONE WITH THE WIND
WILL RETURN AS A HURRICANE
SOONLY

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Sparrow

Sun, 2017-02-05 18:52

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Good write yet I feel you are holding back, we will go where the wind blows us.
There will be no need for the wind when we sup our tea, Yours Ian..

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lovedly

Sun, 2017-02-05 22:45

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what else can we do '
but dream
as we fly along with the wind
then like in a child's fair
going up and down the trambolines
we can only laugh and scream
at my age now I can only dream
you too Ian

when we meet in the farthest folds of eternity
we will only dream
who were we
You and I
okay me

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Sparrow

Mon, 2017-02-06 03:48

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As Hawaiian music plays in my ears there in the distance I see a lonely soul being blown by the wind.
Take control of all your atoms and ways, direct them into a place not of dreams, but a dream of reality.
There you can play with the stars or within the stars, energy can flow where ever.
One space in your time I will have to visit you and then I wonder what I will see.
There in that space, an expanse of gardens that extend to infinity, a special pet, then an older spirit Lady in attendance, oh well I suppose she will make the tea for us both lol.
Take care young Loved and know you are..
Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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