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draped in a lavender light

I wore fear
like a winding sheet,
leaving behind trails
of dead dreams

I held hope in my hands
and weeping, it slid
through my fingers
evaporating to naught

I undulated to music
praying for redemption,
within the passage
I was left bereft, still, taciturn

but by relinquishing velleity
into the firmament,
and smashing my glass heart
for the loves' of my life

I've begun to believe
in miracles again,
I am finding the way
that comforts my soul

A shimmering
lavender light,
shines with serenity
burns out the fear
and builds a blaze of hope,
by loving without doubt

the whips of regret
are now unmoving
fires have been stoked,
this mystery now has élan

I am flesh, reborn out
and into this life, once again.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
for the lilac light in my life...with love always
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Hope and believing in something greater then ourselves is how us mortals survive our trials and tribulations.
This poem is filled with both, you have captured that hard to explain quality in both cases.
To me this stanza speaks volumes of finding the strength to continue:

"I've begun to believe
in miracles again,
I am finding the way
that comforts my soul"

I do not believe in God, but if there is one this poem touches some entity that gives us the faith to fight on.
This is beautified written, and shows that there is hope still in us if we believe in something bigger than ourselves

Kudos!!
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

I don't believe in a god per se but I believe in something greater than all this that surrounds us, we have no idea what's out there we can see small spots of light, study it and examine it but until we experience it we will never know will we...I have to hold onto something or I might just slip off the face of reality, I have been blessed with a friend who's stood by me through the thick and thin of it all and really in ways keep me sane when I thought I was going to lose it, This is for him and he knows who he is

thanks for your read and your wonderful comment I am so so happy you liked this one.

much love Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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This is a wonderful stand alone poem which is eloquent of the transition from hopelessness to hopefulness and redeeming lost self confidence....choice of words is exquisite...a nice come back poem...

much love n hugz...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you so much for such a positive review, I am just trying to find my voice again I kinda lost myself there for a while but I am slowly finding bits of me ;) lol... I am so happy you liked it hun thanks for the visit I will be reading before bed, I look forward to catching up with your poems.

much love and hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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nothing but the best from you and you consistently deliver! I love that word: [velleity]
Love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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LOL less of the pressure mate, I try my best but I am a little lost at the moment I am coming good its just gonna take time for me to crawl out of this hole I dug for myself, big smile I love that word as well I haven't never used it before and it just popped into my head and I thought time to put it to good use

love and higgliest bugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Just a note of intrusion, the word Jayne uses it was used a while back, in the write on the Genealogy of Morality, by none other than the German philosopher Friedrich Nietzsche, some time in the late 1800's, Jayne must be very old LOL.
Take care young Gee, know we think of you sometimes, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I am getting ancient LOL... ;)

my love always Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Superb poem, amazing pictures only you could paint. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Big Smile thank you for that hun I really appreciate it, its so nice to see you I will pay you a visit later on...

love Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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The shadows are playing Peace Pipe in my head as I read your poem and a moisture forms in my vision,
The lavender light is beautiful and I guess there are some more yet for you to feel.
A pathway that was strewn with debris has been cleared and repaired as you walk within your own thoughts, seek out those days of wonder that are there with you also the ones yet to feel.
This write has depicted a sojourn that most of us go through sometime during the walk through life.
It also shows the elation and sense that prevails, life is not easy.
A write that shows your best words, Sadie says that to walk with a thought of the inner self being free to choose, is the best walk there is, then to walk with friends it makes it even better.
Take care young Lady and know we all care, Yours Ian xx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I am so happy you liked this one so much, there is a kind of journey in words going on for me at the moment I write what comes to mind and hands and it frees me just a little bit more, The lilac/lavender light shines for me day and night and its been my constant and kept me sane when I might have just slipped away, there is a beauty and love that radiates from it that you cant help but feel comforted and loved and secure from.

There is a sense of elation of finding life again and knowing that its all going to get better with the choice of change, you cant just sit and expect things to get better, I have been pushed back into life by a wonderful friend who's always there for me, no matter what. Much like you.

Tell Sadie I have a head full of words yet to write, I may even write one for the her and the children and my friend the sister ;)

with love always Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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“I am the image that you want to see”
This the little girl said sweetly to me
I thanked her for being with me so.
She told me, “You have a long way to go”

“I talk not of this now, you find yourself in.
But of the two worlds, and where each begins.”
“That you have so much to do with things now,
I will always help you, and be there somehow.”

I thanked her for being there, yet still doubted
“You are strange” she said “It’s you that I led”
“As storms threatened your pathway ahead,
I just whispered in your thoughts never shouted.”

“What can I do for all the things you give me?”
I asked, as I thought there would a payment be.
“Just send love to all” she said this is what it is about
“Just trust your think” she whispered I can’t shout.

“Talk to me as the evening’s time gathers you in”
“Thank you Sadie, but there are so many things,
I need to think with a future that stays clear,
I know that you will always be near.

“Think of me when the lavender glow brings perfume
I will be there with you, as you think of its tiny bloom.
Now I must visit Ian and have a nice cup of tea.”
With this Sadie faded away from the think and me..

A double talk to me, through to you, strange how they come and go.
Take each day and think of all the good things it brings then throw the bad on the rubbish heap, as when you think they are bad then they are.
Loving your new writes, you need to put a couple more out here LOL, I may be mad, but in my madness there is a strange sanity, as always Yours Ian.T xx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Oh Ian

You just made me tear up I don't know what to say, except tell Sadie I said thank you

my love always Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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There is a beautiful young lady here dressed in a jellow dress with golden hair and a big smile.
She is saying that the door has always been open, and she is so pleased that you walked through and left all those things behind.
As to the rest of your journey she says that the lady you know will be there always, and she (Sadie) will walk with you some more, just to show you off to others, the words are forming in order of a beauty that you have only to use..
Sadie says use the think and the words will walk with you always, there are many that need to read them.
Take care young lady, Yours Ian x
PS:- remember I can only say what they give to me in think xx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I know you are wanting to keep line lengths close to the same but I think you might be making a mistake here and there by doing so. Example : I think the first 2 lines would read better if combined. And this holds true at a few other spots as well. Now I'll go look up what "velleity" lol. As usual your emotive transference and imagery are top nothch which leaves me with no further gripes lmao........stan

I actually had the line lengths longer as you have suggested just the two lines to start with and then I broke them up in the edits, hmmm I am not sure now I will have a think and change it and see what everyone thinks.. Velleity its a pretty obscure word I read it somewhere years ago and its stuck in my head I just never used it before, lol glad I left you gripe less he he he

take care hun talk soon

love and hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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we joined together
and it seems

I am still standing at the entrance
who will let me in?

loved

I have not commented on anything of yours in a while. I had my reasons.
I would just like to say something to you and I hope it does not offend you.
I notice that when you comment on someone poem, you seem to always make it about you. I think that when you comment it should be only about the poem and not comment like this part of your comment here that you do on every poem or something to that affect.

"I am still standing at the entrance
who will let me in?"
The poem is not about what you have done or what you wish would happen here. it just sounds very needy or your part, you can write very well. You do not need to be told that you are a good writer. you just need to write without interjecting yourself in to someone's poem.
Be you and don't worry about where you stand as a writer but where you are going with it for you.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Some times I do something
unintentionally
But shall take note of your hammer....
how I wish someone had come up with it earlier
as a sledge ....!

loved

I have been at Neopoet since 2008-09 I was here long before you hun I was once the chair of the AEC, that was an eon ago lol I didn't rejoin the site after the crash straight away as I didn't realize it was back up and running

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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