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The dragons of Delusia
Nothing grows on fallow plains
in the land of Delusia
The seeds of loves fiery passions are gone
destroyed by the elixirs of man
Over barren fields they fly
searching for the reason why
not an ember remains
of what was once had
They've not yet learned
a fire can burn
by tending with different hand
Radiant and shimmering their colors were
yet now they have turned to grey
and evermore they will weep
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2019-10-11 00:20
beautiful
deep thought provoking
*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.
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c lynn brooks
Fri, 2019-10-11 08:54
Barbara
thank you very much it is appreciated
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author commentRottiestyl
Sun, 2019-10-13 01:53
This made me think
of how gorgeous the mythical dragon is in flight. Yet as they search for what was once abundant, love, again they cry out against the ways of man, waving his destructive hand.
I read this twice also. This time though, it was the lack of using no periods to end a sentence. It was a bit bumpy but after the second reading I knew where to pause so I could get the full meaning. Again your subtle rhyming made me smile. I write that! I love this way of writing!
Have a happy happy!
(Oh, my name is RottsDragon in my on line games. I have city names like, RottsColossus, RottsDrakon, RottsPhoenix, RotsHellion among others. All other words meaning Dragon. I tend to ramble, just pat me on the head as I leave. ; ) )
Rottie
aka: Kim
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
c lynn brooks
Sun, 2019-10-13 08:08
Kim
Pat Pat lol thank you so much In freeverse each thought receives it's own line they are called line breaks thank you again
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author commentSparrow 42
Fri, 2019-10-25 18:44
C Lynn
Loved this write but I would have liked it if more story had been written..
I write a few Dragon tales, and so they exist in the world of myth and Spirit
we must talk or think of them more.
There is a need to breathe in the reading, so to split it up a little into solid parts would be good..
Still the write was great,
Yours Ian ..
Words can build a nation
c lynn brooks
Sat, 2019-10-26 07:21
Ian
thank you for the read and comment not sure what you mean by solid
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