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Dragons Breath
Once upon a time a dragon wept;
fair maidens never seemed to understand
why elder set appointments went unkept
(his fervent wish, let sacrifice be banned).
The errant knights who wandered on strange quests
amused him with their pennant, shield and lance,
one hiccup as his hurried lunch digests
would have Sir hot-foot skip a comic dance.
No entertaining tin-can with a spear
could woo him from a woeful want of sleep
at length he sadly quit this sordid sphere
as villagers' vile stories cut too deep.
Then: heroes battled monsters to the death.
Now: faded fairy tales of dragons’ breath.
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Comments
judyanne
Sat, 2016-05-21 04:57
are you allowed, or did you intend
to use the rhyme change in stanza 3?
or is this not intended to be a sonnet? Maybe not - is there a volta there?
I actually found it a little off-putting (the rhyme change that is, not the poem - I loved that) - but that's possibly ms rigid me lol
It would still work if you changed the order of the last two verses (lines)
Love the write
Gave me a smile
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Keith Logan
Sat, 2016-05-21 05:12
Cut and paste problems
caused that swap. It was unintentional and should really have been exactly as you pointed out. I must hire a proof reader.
Keith Logan
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brittle light
Sun, 2016-05-22 12:30
charming, even poignant ..
charming, even poignant ...and agree about switching the last two lines.
Al
Keith Logan
Mon, 2016-05-23 12:18
Done
thank you for commenting, it is always appreciated.
Keith Logan
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