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Down Both Roads

Asking questions already answered
in a desperate quest to clinch a dream
by the skin of a tooth.
That is how life is like,
for any one born in a cage.

You see the ends,
and know the forced limits,
but when darkness falls
and your eyes fail you,
you ask the slave-master

"How far will you let me go?"

Oscillating like a pendulum,
eternal in the timed swing:
you are set to and fro,
and that is all you know.

You can imagine,
because your mind is free,
yet you are bound,
and that is all that shall be.

Looking for the escape
is to find life's exit sign,
and hold your breath
and hope the theologians were right:
better forgiveness or oblivion,
than the cage.

That is what it feels like,
when you stand before
the forked road -
both well taken -
and ask the classical question:
"which shall I take?"

Not knowing which is better;
to be the rash fool,
or the calculating one.

In the end, a choice must be made,
and the coward will choose -
for that is what one is, who doesn't -
to watch and wait,
pretending to himself to calculate
untill the night falls once more,
and the owls hoot their dismay.

Then he shall peer into the black,
and be miserable in his heart:
He shall ask the slave-master,
"How far will you let me go?"

But he shall get no reply,
because he is that master,
and he is his own slave.

He shall be quiet till the moon sleeps,
and the owls give way to song-birds,
and the refreshing rays of sun
illuminate the metal bars
of his mental cage.

Then he shall sigh on his fate,
and look down both roads,
asking,
"which shall I take?"

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The demise of a caged creature.
Some of the cages enclose the universe as you have pointed out in this difficult piece, which may I add held my mind, but not captive to your theme.
Well written and well laid out, that each of us has our cage is fine until you are able to seek outside of your confines so you will be..
To be able to see this indicates that your philosophy is from outside of the box, always remember this does frighten some lol, Take care out there and be sure you have something to hold on to should you venture out, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks for the comment.

This one came to me in one of my more pensive moments. I'd not like to believe everyone has a cage (even though they may do.)

With this piece, I tried to capture (pun) the feeling I've been having for quite some time now. It's like psychological slavery to ones self.

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