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Door To The Universe October Contest

Windows and Doors

the door to the universe is open
a star so bright like a spaceship
so close I think it landed
in my backyard one night.

in the wee hours under darkness
I rose from slumber unawaken
dreams and visions no nightmares
before exiting the door that opens every night.

windows of light surround me
blues, purples, and whites
comforts me when I'm unaware I need it
I'm never alone in the space I'm in.

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just my thoughts here.

Windows and Doors
the door to the universe is opened---- Try open?
a star so bright like a spaceship
so close I think it landed
in my backyard one night.
in the wee hours under darkness
I rose from slumber unawakened---try unawaken?
dreams and visions no nightmares
before exiting the door that opens every night.
windows of light surround me
blues, purples, and whites
comforts me when I'm unaware I need it
I'm never alone in the space I'm in.

this is quite an exciting peice very original. Good luck in the october contest.

Thank you...Teddy

I will make the suggests

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Sorta like going in the out door.

What is going in a out door?.. the door opens you enter but never really go out.. Youre there and not there when fully awakened ... like being in two places at same time...

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All sorts of interpretations. I really meant my phrase as a point of juxtaposition .

i forgot about juxtaposition. Im educated in poetry. the education I have I gain here for last 12 years

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