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The Doll - Idle Time Workshop

Little girl stared at the doll.
Beautiful doll.
Golden curls.
Bright blue eyes.
Sweet rosy cheeks.
It had been a gift to little sister
from Mommy and Daddy.
She touched its soft
smooth neck
and with one swift twist - Pop!
Off came its head.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
A wee bit jealous.
Editing stage: 
Workshop: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

LoL. Oh your ending is good, I actually have an older sister that did something quite similar to me!

Thank you...Teddy

Sibling rivalry...it's real!
Thank you!
L

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that's so mean! will little girls actually decapitate their sisters' dollies? Shame, shame! tsk, tsk. lol. Jerry

Jealousy can be pretty cruel!
Thank you for reading!
L

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ouch very astute example of jealousy short sweet and gets right to the point

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Thank you for reading and your generous comments!
L

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I am just wandering if Mommy and daddy? Would be better? I guess for me it's the language that makes it playful. lol I do so love this it's so true to what goes on between siblings, just to say it's not me, it was my big sister, she is still the same today.

Thank you...Teddy

Good suggestion - I did, however, want the language to reveal a sense of an older sibling. I'll think that over!
Thank you!
L

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I liked that one, for sure! Yes, I think that he [Dad], should be daddy; makes it sound a bit more childish. [Therefore more petty]. Great [twist] and yes a good pun. LoL ~ Geez.
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Daddy it is! Good suggestion from both you and Teddy. :)
Thank you so much for reading!
L

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Hopefully it wasn't a Barbie. Those things are worth a bloody fortune nowadays if original.

This earned a great chuckle.

No Barbies were harmed in the making of this poem. :)
Thank you so much for reading!
L

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