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DOGWALKER

DOGWALKERS
With apologies to e.e.cummings

Many think it is only exercise for the dog
yet, the exercise just may be for the owner in tow.

Dogs plow thru their fields of smells
these are their curiosity, sniffing
into a canine nirvana
those chance encounters of odors wafting
from a lifted leg
or a squat
perchance delighted by a meat wrapper wadded up
tossed out causing the dog to “see”.

But back, as the dog walking with
his mistress or master,
those deluded into thinking
they (the she or the he)
owns the hound,
who is (by chance)
thinking: just who is on
the end of the leash, anyway?

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is alright, although you might have been a little more creative; it does give the theme a sniff in the right direction. Your language is fine and the logic is good from beginning to end. I like the allusion to the dog's thought process and wondering
about who is on the other end of their leash. However, if the dog is smart, it certainly should know their master/mistress by now! I think that line needs a little push in the direction of asking about if the person really knows who is in charge? Anyway, a fun read. ~ Geez.
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I see that you did, indeed, make the question, of who the owner/master thinks is in control. ~ Geez.
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