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A Doctor's Patience

Submitted by docmaverick on Sat, 2012-06-02 09:34

I know exactly what's up, friend
and I usually have things right;

but in my quest to not offend
I'll try my best to seem polite.

I don't care much for conflict, so
at those times I may look away;

but, I'll remember times with you
wish I'd stayed at home that day!

You're brand of scandalousity
does almost make me ill;

a detour would have set me free
avoiding clashes with your will.

Your hidden mind agendas, or
what really makes me tense;

is, I could be a "real doctor"
if I'd possessed patients!

doc.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
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Last few words: 
A little "fun" with the spellings of "patience", and "patients"! Sorry.....won't happen, again.......probably. doc.
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Comments

BlueDemon77

Wed, 2012-06-13 00:20

BlueDemon77's picture

Well Done Doc, I enjoyed it. You have a fun laid back voice. It reminds me most closely of Robert E. Howard's A Gent from Bear Creek. Thanks for the reminder that all poetry doesn't have to be about pain, death, grief, or lost love. Good to virtually meet you also!.

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

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