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Do Not Run ...( reviewed Ma'am)

Stand don't run Time none can ever beat
how so ever fast you try to perform a feat

Time alone is the only marathoner
all have to pace in time in every race
lagging from far very far behind

it waits not for a millionth of a whiff
then why run stand firm but don't be stiff

no amount of penetration time alone has a spin
none can ever on another human collar pin

so why run stand still wait for Jill
she's just gone up the hill but it will her squeeze
the moment she does sneeze in the chilly breeze

so don't run stand still
let it do its very own thing
as life and death only timely begin

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Hi lovedly, nice poem with good advice, philosophical. I think it's more for kids in high school than for grown ups, but never mind me. No offense meant, it's what I think. I would also join up some lines, as usual. A poem should fit in the screen so that the reader doesn't have to scroll up and down to get the whole of it. You have some doubtful grammatical verses.
I'll return with more time, all the best, Gracy

"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Yes time awaits no man but we can all Try to be the stone that diverts it a bit.

time has and can have no obstruction
it will pierce or jump over
side line it may
till stones give way

if you mean
stones are not hills
but silly we
then scribble ur views please

stan you alone are neos

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