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the distant cry
the distant cry
from within
desire to sweep the past
with sunrise’s fast arrival...
to
let the time’s tolls be due
let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue
wipe the sweat of my brow
forget the loathe-some
of a long distant occurrence
with demise of thoughts of desperate dreams
manifestations
of things gone astray
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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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AmmaKonadu
Mon, 2012-05-28 16:51
I see the message
in there...no need to allow the past to affect the present and what it offers.
loved
Mon, 2012-05-28 23:09
GREAT
young lady
write more poetry /articles,,, it reduces stress also
when in stress
MEDITATE
AND
when in loneliness read my poetry \
POEM
'' WHEN IN LONELINESS THINK OF ME''
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author commentloved
Tue, 2012-05-29 07:13
Thanx this is how I wanted to stabilise the young gal
who had a misfortune
most young gals relying in good faith face..
they know not guys only do
and not actually wooo
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author commentweirdelf
Tue, 2012-05-29 07:51
Some of your best poetryis very good,
and this is one of them. But the majority of your work is incoherent rubbish.
I Eanestly entreat you to take time with your poems and don't write the mindless, contrived meaningles crap that forms the majority of your work
Pleading for recognition is pathetic.
with respect, yes.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
loved
Tue, 2012-05-29 08:33
I love the sledge hammer.
looking forwards to more
if I can myself be happy
with 51 poems for sure,
I want nothing more.
Crap is like garbage
as you say ,
glad you are so frank,
Jess
do come more often my way.
But the ....majority* ....of your work is incoherent rubbish......
READ
*MAXORITY ==MAXIMUMORITY===1/8000
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author commentweirdelf
Tue, 2012-05-29 08:47
I have seen the best of your work and it is truly profound
I can only suggest you spend a little more time thinking through what you say, instead of spilling garbage on your page.
You know I would ignore you if I didn't believe in your ability. And you would get much more positive feedback if you didn't write 80% rubbish and spend the rest of the time pathetically pleading for recognition.
You have the ability, the talent, just don't write 80 to one rubbish, take care of every word you say, and you will get the recognition your deserve.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
loved
Tue, 2012-05-29 09:00
Aye , Aye Sir...
grateful....
shall
and
hence be more diligent
as advised
tc
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author commentweirdelf
Thu, 2012-05-31 05:39
My dear Loved, my word is my mood
and should never be taken as gospel.
Let's just say I loved this poem and forget the rest of what I said, ok?
You deserve unconditional kudos for your achievement.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
loved
Thu, 2012-05-31 07:42
Jess
k
tc
loved
author commentNordic cloud
Thu, 2012-06-07 14:51
This was a most unusual poem,
This was a most unusual poem, potent in its own way, I liked these lines
"let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue"
making flowers reek was a genius stroke.
Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
loved
Fri, 2012-06-08 05:18
I am grateful
for your fleeting visit
and
beautiful expression ma'am
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author commentloved
Fri, 2014-05-09 03:53
thank you so much all
selected 2/51
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