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Dirty Little Secrets (by: eddy styx)

Dirty Little Secrets

spying through windows
discovering...
those dirty little secrets
not aired in public.
game faces not engaged
concealing smiles
not in place.
I note
weariness,
here...where
exhaustion comes out
from behind the public
masks.
lies no longer apply
in the dying,
light of day
here...where
you can speak truth
shaming
your Devils!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

don't lean over too far, that ladder could fall from beneath you and leave you hanging on the window-ledge! LoL
Nice little something from eddy! I like that eddy keeps the secrets he sees and the tales he hears told, saving them for the right time. Special occasions, if you will. Your title is good, the language use equally so. Smooth and the theme flows well from beginning to end. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

thanks for the critique. I will be editing it more as it need crisping up. when will I be reading another Killer & Anubis poem? really looking forward to one, or two, or...

ever, eddy

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Is it a concern that I feel at home with eddy?

This is yet another clever poem of eddy's evil existence...yet I love him to bits!!

Regards

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

eddy has taken up a new hobby. he has always been a people watcher, but now he is tempting the fates, risking detection! it gives him an added thrill, while choosing victims, LOL!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

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