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DIFFERENT ROADS

Submitted by Geremia on Sun, 2015-07-05 11:04

DIFFERENT ROADS

Life is movement and change
and nothing is ever the same;
for the worse or for the better.
one finds a different way
and rejoices in the finding;
the other is left behind crying
trying to understand the nature of loss
and the pain of ending.

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judyanne

Mon, 2015-07-06 09:04

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I like this, until the word 'never'.i think I would prefer something like 'struggling' ... because I do believe we will understand one day :)

Can i challenge you Joe?
Write a poem about something good that has happened to you ...

You can return the challenge if you like
:)
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Geremia

Mon, 2015-07-06 09:56

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Thanks, Judyanne. I will make a change

joe

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Geremia

Thu, 2015-07-30 11:27

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OF WORDS

What is the power of words
but to speak the truth
of life's moments
There is no truth in joy
where there is pain
there is no room for pain
where there is pleasure.
there is a beauty in all things
in beginnings and ends
in Spring and in Winter,
Let the soul tell its sadness
let the heart break when to break
is all that it can do

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Sparrow

Mon, 2015-07-06 11:15

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A good write and there must have been a correction as it reads fine.
We walk the same pathway but different roads..
As with Judy it is time to write of something we can rejoice in that has happened to us, just let me know I will join in the challenge.
Take care young Joe , see you at the journey's end,
Yours Ian..

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lovedly

Wed, 2015-07-08 11:18

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kindly please Joe

Esker

Wed, 2015-07-29 05:45

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concisely worded this very well!
i was not good with the personal nor intimate
we were glad when endings come..
sometimes looking..
it is hard ...but so was those years
thick skin or fall in.and never come out.

even in passing we cannot have our
moment...some people control that
vast..my mother was like this.
equally funny..and all the rest..

but yes..nothing worse then paying
for it in real time..and then just
not knowing for the rest..
an entirety of existance in this
hazy place...

my life!
so I can relate to the poem
well even if I cannot express it!
in so much too myself..
why poetry helps others..
How this has helped me greatly
today!!

thank U Geremia!

Geremia

Wed, 2015-07-29 10:50

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Nothing was ever easy...and it just gets harder, We pay our dues--some of us--for each moment of joy.

thanks,, Sreve

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lovedly

Wed, 2015-07-29 23:48

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SEE EVEN Judy
joins me to say

shred or shed your negativity away
compose some beautiful poetry to day

we all will and must
as have to
will pass away
one day

so while living
why sad should we stay
lets be happy
and
like yesterday be gay ,
if not like that
your country promotes today

Have a Happy tone
from today
my way!

Geremia

Thu, 2015-07-30 11:22

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OF WORDS

What is the power of words
but to speak the truth
of life's moments
There is no truth in joy
where there is pain
there is no room for pain
where there is pleasure.
there is a beauty in all things
in beginnings and ends
in Spring and in Winter,
Let the soul tell its sadness
let the heart break when to break
is all that it can do..

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lovedly

Thu, 2015-07-30 12:32

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nothing i can do

a glass is always full
half liquid and balance air
never is a glass empty
so use word
as u wish to

be opti or pessi

MISTICKSSSss
what can Loved do???

scribbler

Thu, 2015-07-30 15:39

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I reckon we are sent hard times so we'll truly appreciate the good ones..........stan

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