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Different Paths

If you search for wealth
walk a path well known
If you search for love
walk a path less known
If you search for peace
walk a path together
If you search for God
walk a path forever.

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but if you want to make rhymes, you should make a longer story, this is more like a quotation, because it is so short.
Good, but need longer. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Gezzer, I will add some more lines, couldn't sleep again last night, my mind is always switched on. Finally went to sleep about 5am but up at 7am. Regards Chris.

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I have the same problem; I don't sleep well. If I have four hours straight, that is a good night. Usually, it is more like an hour and a half and then up for 30 mins. and back to sleep for another hour and a half. Sometimes, I wake at 3 am and then don't get back to sleep until after breakfast and Neo. then another hour or two sleep around 9:30 until 11:00. It's hard to make up for that kind of crazy. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I know exercise will make you sleep like a baby but I cant do that much because of my heart, I'm not overweight just was given a bad heart when God was handing them out. Can't go back and ask for a replacement, but I will remind him when I see him. Maybe he will give me a second chance. Regards Chris

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the addition of the new lines, they make it more of a poem. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks for your help, Geezer. Regards Chris

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