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Diamonds or Doughnuts (revised) 08-13-20

Diamonds Or Doughnuts
(for Steven)

my heart is pressed
between the pages
of the book of you.
I see only darkness
without the light.
from your wood-smoke
colored eyes,
your soft deep voice
carries me like
a dappled daydream
over the treacherous
rocks of my perilous day.
it is your calm
sagacity which
holds my fragile sanity,
and keeps it within its
clockwork frame.
your eternal knowing
of Me keeps me
from shattering into
a thousand shards.
and I would not trade
you for diamonds nor doughnuts

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what a delightful dedication to a worthy husband you wrote. Don't trade him for doughnuts or diamonds. Doughnuts are gone within a day or so, and diamonds need to be safeguarded, but his unconditional love for you will last as long as you both may live on earth. A poem much to my liking. I can totally relate to it. It's lovely, Cat. Yours, Jerry

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I was sure that you would be able to relate to this little poem of mine, as it was written straight from the heart :) thanks so much for telling me. I really appreciate that. you have a great day!

*hugs, Cat

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your wording as always is so descriptive and perfect I love this poem what a wonderful tribute to Steve

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you know from personal experience, just how much I adore him ;) I'm not sure just exactly what he sees in me, LOL!

love ya, Cat
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he sees what I see a beautiful generous soul

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thank you my dear friend.

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Your love for Steven has been forever clear to me, you are *soul mates* and this poem makes my heart warm with your words. But are you sure you wouldn't give him up for dounuts? Not even the creme ones? lol. Of course I'm only teasing, I feel the love and you are both extremely lucky to have eachother. Your words show that no matter what as long as you are together anything is possible and to feel that someone understands you inside out is so special. My love to you both.

Thank you...Teddy

aww...you are so sweet! you know me very well. and that makes you special to me also. just keep on being you!

love ya, Cat
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many have already commented before me and I agree with them....all i can say is that it really seems coming from heart and you have expressed it without mincing words...wishing you and Steve a very long and continually fruitful wedded life ..

much love and warm hugs..

raj (sublime_ocean)

thank you so much! you are always so kind! thanks for the good wishes, too!

*hugs, Cat
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that while many may express the thoughts and terms that you have, that none may really know them until they have been married for a lot of years. They may genuinely believe every word that they say, but, "the proof is in the pudding". You have the "pudding". ~ Gee.
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this means a lot to me!

*hugs, Cat
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but what about me, pray tell. I have been married to the same woman for 52 years and she still loves my cute walk and the way I wrinkle my darling little nose when I pout. Except for you, Gracy, and now my other dear acquaintance, Cat, hardly anyone else reads my brainy verses and nearly everybody treats me like a leper. I think I'll have myself a torrential cry and flush myself down the toilet. Then you will see what a fine poet you have lost in me. Yours, Lord Jerry Byron

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Jerry, you are a lucky man :)

*hugs, Cat
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I'm sure that she looks right around your big ego and finds the kind hearted, genteel man that you were when she met you and waits for you to bring her her Oh Henry's. Seriously, anyone who has managed to stay married to the same person that long, has to have some redeeming qualities. I guess she sees them. ~ Geez.
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we haven't killed each other yet, so we must be doing something right! LOL!

*hugs, Cat
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"Big ego"? Is that what they call it these day? Oh, you mean big ego as in inflated "egotism"? Where is my mind? There I thought it was a euphemism for . . . .Got ya. Lol. Jerry

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what lurks in the mind of a woman? The "Big Ego" knows. ~ Geez.
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Look at the top of this beautiful poem you do not need to repeat the title? Just wanted to point it out dear teacher, today I got up close and personal with eddy a very interesting character

Thank you...Teddy

for the suggestion, I will keep that in mind for my next posts. I'm glad that you are getting to know eddy styx. just be careful...he isn't sane, LOL!

*hugs, Cat
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Well everybody else has left me lacking in praise of a poem baring your soul about your life's love. So I'll only suggest changing the first "me" to ME so as to emphasize his knowing the real you.

thanks, Stan, I'll do that! bless you for reading and commenting.

*hugs, Cat
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