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Devour your Ego in 2020

You all are not as young
as I thought you would be.
angels composing silently
such exotic poetry

Just a wee bit exotic slightly
No ego kindly friends love it
You are not as young
as I thought you would be
an angel composing silently
such exotic poetry

The men's hearts will bleed
they dare not compare
with the soul you set free
they will not bend a wee bit

their ego will them alone swallow
when they come to know
that compared to your
love, lust and passion
minus their love
they are seemingly not so hollow

in search of that
imagery red wagon
all now need more
but hold on to your own imagination
some can, many swallow

and

the burning fire
once quenched
seeks more
from the same fellow
who enjoyed you in the red
just a wee while ago

Some men are not that shallow
depth is their passion
deep too
as so think
many of you
men do stand
but not still
Holding their EGO
they will

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Comments

I can't make heads or tails of this one. Give me a hint? ~ Gee.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

When I composed this
the topic of he day was

DEVOUR YOUR EGO
Many guys thought they alone could compose
and bragged about I suppose

Now make some sense you may
else from here I'll discard it righta way

author comment

get it now. I'm thinking that you were of the opinion that many of the poets here would be young, beautiful women who would be composing wonderous poems; only to discover that there are a bunch of egotistical older men, that mainly value their own writings and do not respond well to criticism. LoL
Sorry, sarcasm seems to be the order of the day. ~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

all over the sites

not here particularly
Since you are at the helm
you may know it
betterly
thanks Gee
some may still read it

author comment

Is the key downfall of any human at all it disorganizes one's future by sending everyone around you away, nice one that's a lesson for egoistic people.

Thank you Simon
MERY XMAS AND A NEW EGO-LESS 2020

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