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Desire

Melanin skin
Flawlessly glowing
Blazing wintertime
Set fire to my heart

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Yes I was, I live in Florida and it’s usually warm here every winter! You can go to the beach anytime here and I absolutely love it.

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idea, [blazing wintertime]. Desire, something all of us understand, comes in many colors. ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

It definitely does.

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This is really clear and concise. Impressive that you managed to do that in just the four verses. And the words are really beautiful. They have a really nice sound together. Very poetic!

Hi Liberty, it's the first time I've read any of your poetry. If you're new here, then welcome to Neopoet family. I'm fairly new, as well. I'll peek at your profile now.
As others have said, you've deftly put a lot in four lines. Concise and clear.
I've been to Florida and it was very warm, both in Winter and Summer. Beautiful area, so much to visit.
I live in Argentine Patagonia and we're still in Winter, had snow recently.
All the best, Gracy

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