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Demons
Heart has hardened
Soul is black
Devil says he's got my back
Venturing out
Sadistic world unknown
It's time my demons be known
The fight is on
Can't turn back
Damage I've done threw me off track
Men dead
Shead a tear
Demons say to persevere
Hateful heart
Demented mind
Thank go so few of my kind
Zachary J. Eakin 8-7-2015
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Comments
Sparrow
Sat, 2015-08-08 18:22
Zac
Welcome back, It is good to see members from a few years ago returning and writing so well, please ask if there are any problems,
Look forward to your next write, Yours Ian.T
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
weirdelf
Wed, 2015-08-12 04:14
nice
one of my favourite words- accountability.
As a poetic critique the piece feels through the short lines to lack gravitas.
Then again the short lines add punch.
cheers,
Jess
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