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deadly vocation (by: eddy styx)

deadly vocation (by: eddy styx)

this is mine
the unspeakable...
it is done.
the dark ruby
that was her heart,
hidden behind
an ivory wall
of shallow pulsing breath
lies now exposed
to the ebony miracle
of endless night!
the deep sapphire
of her unseeing eyes
surrounded
by the glint
of milky whites.
gazing into those orbs
at the reflection
of myself,
grasping the bloody knife
which drips
garnet tears.
you are not
the last
deceitful lying faithless
soul
to be kissed
and set free
by this enraptured blade.
and so I move on
into the shadows,
for justice awaits
its obedient servant...
and I go forth
to fulfill my trusted calling!

* eddy styx is my malevolent, Male alter ego who writes dark poetry.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Last few words: 
as I've stated, eddy styx is my malevolent Male alter ego who writes dark poetry.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Explicit Content

Comments

Deliciously poeticly dark, I never could find favourite lines in your work, I think it's because I tremble after reading.
What imagery I see. If I ever need you to slice my roast beef I shall call on you? Wonderful work deadly vocation indeed.

Thank you...Teddy

thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. it is greatly appreciated. you are always a welcome guest, here :) Cat tells me that she thinks you have a gift for writing dark poetry. i would love to read what you produce. by the way, your poem about the snake had me entranced ;)

ever, eddy
*always, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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i'm charmed, and will ask my muse to write something dark on my behalf.

with great teachers like you both its quite easy to find the courage to write outside the comfort zone. so thank you both

Thank you...Teddy

I am honored by such praise, as is the Cat, lol... I invite you to call me eddy ;)

ever, eddy
*always, Cat
*

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Thank you you are quite nice lol

Thank you...Teddy

nice but deadly?
LOL
:) eddy

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Of course I was being cautious just in case you start stalking me, terrified I am.

Thank you...Teddy

because I usually only stalk really naughty women!

ever, eddy

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

author comment

what a description Eddy Styx has of you....was it jealousy that makes him become a killer?... or is he supposed to be a serial killer of pretty women?

contrasting verses

raj (sublime_ocean)

actually, i developed out of the Cat's pain and anger. her childhood was traumatic to say the least. a lot of bad things happened. including a mother who hated her and told her so. instead of lashing out and hurting people, the Cat gave birth to me, eddy styx... and i put the rage on the page! hope that explains things. if not, private message me.

ever, eddy
*always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

author comment

it certainly does explain creation of Eddy Styx...I read about your childhood in the comments you made on another poem and appreciate the fact that you handled it as well as you have done....perhaps Steve provided a kind of calming influence on you...i wish both of you a long partnership of love and mutual care & respect...

hugs..

...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Steve is a great influence on me :) he is as calm as he can be. he smooths out my rough edges! ;)

*warm hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

author comment

Cat, your poem is so powerful. So now you're eddy Styx. Are you the river, the three headed hound or the oarsman? I bet you're the one who gets the coins...lol.
Impressive poem, I'll visit your link to see how one purchases your book. My problem is that our Argentine peso is so devalued, that anything in foreign currency is beyond my power of purchase. If it's in e-book format, maybe I can. Nowadays I buy e-books because my cottage has no more room for "real ones". And I'm allergic to the mites in books, are you?
Enjoyed, if that's the right word! Best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

i'm the oarsman, i reach out a bony hand to you and help you board:) i think the books are available through my website (i think an e-book is, too) check out my web site and if it isn't there then you can send me an e-mail and the Cat's husband, Steve can help out. any question's you have you can "private message"me.

ever, eddy
*always Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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