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Deadly Romance

Angus and Enid
fell in love
on a different plain

(the one up there)
(Or down there)

They met, when Angus
lost a toe to dry rot,

their bones chuckled
as their teeth chattered

Enid loved his bony arse,

They walked hand in hand
knuckles clicking and clacking,

knees sounding like
knives being sharpened

It was a beautiful affair,

Until Angus, bent over and snapped.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
So to the title death or deadly I think I love them both, I've gone with chrys's idea for now!
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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love in Zombieland. This was a funny little thing that doesn't need rhyme or even a method. Just plain fun. Try [sounding] instead of sounded. It will still sound like past-tense. Chuckling still... ~ Gee.
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Well I'm blown away that exact word is the only one that didn't feel right and as much as I looked and read aloud it didn't come to me, cheers,. lol glad you have had a chuckle, skeletons in the cupboard no way! Enid and Angus having fun!

Thank you...Teddy

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lol poor man
I would suggest using deadly rather than deathly

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Now you have me thinking because they are skeletons? And he dies again as he snaps? Ok I will wait to here from you? lol it fun

Thank you...Teddy

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thats a great comment you found the humour and you laughed! poor Enid i bet she could kick a butt or two! LOL

thanks for visiting lovedly.

Thank you...Teddy

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I got the image of two Grateful Dead skeletons walking hand in hand. Nice, playful write. I have nothing to add or subtract.

That's exactly it, I found a really cool picture Enid had a viel in black and Angus a top hat. lol.

Nice to meet you, and I am so glad this took your fancy.

Thank you...Teddy

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