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Dark Machine

Meet me in a neon city,
Brought against your will,
A strange new reality,
Humanity gone,
Replaced by some sinister plot,
A dark machine at the head of it all,
So struggle to be free,
Struggle for me,
I might not last,
They line up poets like me,
And shoot us down in the street,
To clear the way for their new society,
You will be free,
Trust me,
Step inside the dark machine,
Tear it apart for me.

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A little while back I came up with the idea to write a poem called "Dark Machine" But I couldn't figure out why I had to write it, I didn't know why it was important. All I knew was that it had to be written. My major problem was I didn't know what direction I was taking with the idea. I thought I knew what I was writing about, but I couldn't begin or end it. I decided not to write the poem for a while and spent a rather long time thinking about it. To be Honest I didn't even know what the "Dark Machine" was, only that I had to somehow write about it. I felt like it wasn't really my idea, it felt like an idea someone had given me. I went camping with my family recently, I was able to get away from a bit of the everyday world. and our second night camping I had a dream, a dream that was colorful but horrific at the same time. The dream wasn't about me, but I was in it, it was about someone else, In the dream there was a game, and we were all playing it. As I awoke I understood everything, I now know what the Dark Machine is.
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I simply can lable this as a distinguished piece. why I love it simply because
though it has the sense of imagination in describing a place seems away from us
yet still it is inside. I think fear is your dark machine.Nothing could be more dangerous than fear and if we need to be free , first thing to do is to tear this fear apart

You will be free,
Trust me,
Step inside the dark machine,
Tear it apart for me.

If I were you , and sure it is only me, I won't capitalize the first word through
because (IMO) it distracts the reader's attention .

I enjoy much

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