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The dark

The dark strikes fear into the hearts of naive children,
Yet to lovers it brings them passion,
and moments of pleasure.
To the sick it gives hours of light relief,
from the agonising pains suffered by day,
but to the troubled soul,
countless questions and thoughts flood his mind,
disturbing much needed rest.

Night time brings lonliness to the single women,
but to husband and wife it reveals their love,
and contentment with each other,
displayed by loving embrace.

To the author or poet the night inspires visions of either horror or passion,
to be remembered and recorded ,
so that others might share their intimate thoughts
and feelings,
But to the eccentric teenager it brings boredom and depression,
not being able to laugh out loud,
for fear of waking everyone.

The dark closes some people up so much,
that they feel unsure and unsafe,
to others it opens them up,
making them able to show their true sensual emotion.

The dark brings some people closer together ,
yet makes others realise how much they love someone,
and realise how far they are apart .
The dark brings different things to different people,
in different circumstances,
and makes them react in different ways.
But one thing thing is for certain,
the night brings silence and peace to a world,
as it rests and dreams of a better place.
without war, starvation discrimination and death.
A place where people can forfill their desires without
thinking of consquences or realism .

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I liked how you have covered how darkness/night affects different individuals. If you put in some extra effort, for example by avoiding repetition of "the dark brings" it would lift your poem a lot....that's my opinion...

keep writing...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thankyou very much x

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