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Dante's reply

Where,
if not my love be tangled
would I be?

Standing upon such fire
In misery

How could I forsake love
that is of burning flames

In a jar suffocated by closure

My air frozen in an untimely death

My ever aching wish to
spread your fire

leaves my soul and mind
in a world without thought

There will never be a place
I would cherish more
in life or death

Therefore, I could only be truly satisfied

In paradise or hell

as long as I am with you.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Dante has spoken!
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critique. [There for] should be all one word. [Therefore]. Dante speaks rashly, but I understood him as he mumbled about losing his mind over a woman. Same as it ever was, same as it ever was... ~ Geezer.
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Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

Thank you my friend I guess my typos will never go away. Thank you very much for that. Ps I have re read your poem as is and it's truly wonderful.

Thank you...Teddy

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Sounds as though we have a mutual admiration society going on here. LoL ~ Geezer.
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Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

Hi, Teddy,
Wow, "in paradise or hell as long as I am with you." Very Dante-like! I'm still catching up with the entire epic poem. Nice!
Thank you!
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i kind of got lost in him this week, really great to see you on my page and a huge thank you.

Thank you...Teddy

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