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Dancing In The Flames

Zeus by whose touch
are all things transformed

a water reed becomes a girl
glistening scales her dark ringlets

a river flowing her sex
both within and without

the awakening of her womanhood
a pearl in a vessel of wine

he has the power to coalesce
all imperfections

& yet he makes lovers
as inconstant as a summer breeze

a concerto for imbalance
in the heavens

man he makes blind as Oedipus
who choose their bitter fate

women you dare not look upon
as Eurydice lest you lose your soul
to night eternal

drink the wine, summon the pearl
dance in the flames of transformation

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