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Dancing Balls

A very diplomatic poet
decided to wait
let his girl fan
show her gait
ere he upon her charms
does begin to vibrate

this composition
of a poem
in silence
let her wait
golf balls
in his pocket

keep her in waiting
why be blunt
better remain silent
lovely cool decision

why be erratic
let time roll by
like a golf ball
off one's pocket
on to the greener carpet

cell now switched off...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
A guy gets a call Hi babe He couldn't make out who was she
Editing stage: 


intriguing ot least was mildly amused at your wording the ttle is what drew me in

Bright Side Chat
3-4 PM EST

for being amused

author comment

I have always maintained the title is the most important part of a poem as it captures he readers attention and the the first line holds their attention to want to read on would you not agree?

Bright Side Chat
3-4 PM EST

many days no one read it
so I changed the TITLE
Yes title attracts

author comment
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