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Daddy don't cry for me......An emotional audition
I just saw an audition
the girl had to sing a song
for her 'dying' dad
who was
present in the audience
along with her mom
even the four judges cried
a poet must have the vibes
of being calm and silent
but the audience
should shed tears
weep loud enough
for the softest ears
then sing a chorus
what ever will be
will be
what ever will be
oh daddy don't cry
she won the emotion
now you try singing one
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Geezer
Tue, 2021-04-06 07:44
What can I say...
It's a tear-jerker! Get your hand-kerchief out my boy! Only crit. is to get rid of the [also]. Best line? [ weep loud enough for the softest ears.] ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Tue, 2021-04-06 10:56
tissue
Gee is handy
glad you used em
others may
removed also
author commentGracy
Wed, 2021-04-07 14:46
Emotional as well as a
Emotional as well as a joyfull read. I have no tissue handy, so tears are running down my cheeks...lol.
Seriously, another good poem from you, as usual.
All the best, Gracy
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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury
lovedly
Wed, 2021-04-07 16:07
you ae wonderful Gracy ma'am
you help me maintain my stance
while many come and simply glance
take a fleeting chance
damn from lovedly
no romance
a poem in advance
author commentemilya'spoetry
Thu, 2021-04-15 18:13
lovedly
You got ME right in the heart. For a second, I thought you were referencing that girl on American Idol that sang about her dad with him watching, and it was a very emotional moment for all involved, but when I saw "dying" dad, I knew it wasn't (I wanna say he had just recovered from alcoholism). What show was this?
JazzyGurl Emilee A.
lovedly
Thu, 2021-04-15 19:57
yes
same show I saw on tv recently
I changed the title
Someone liked this
but later mentioned
the guy really died .
So i couldn't then cry
She was naturally emotional
she won
so she cried
the audience also
I hope you liked it
what an irony maybe
author commentemilya'spoetry
Mon, 2021-04-19 09:40
YES I did, it was very
YES I did, it was very touching!!! Good job.
JazzyGurl Emilee A.
lovedly
Mon, 2021-04-19 10:52
EP
THANKS A LOT
Rgds
author commentCandlewitch
Mon, 2021-04-19 11:39
hello,
I've read this poem twice, the first time I read it I didn't have the time to respond. very poignant. It reminded me of my Dad...he died when I was eighteen...I took it very hard. as usual you strike a chord with your fine poetry. thank you for this.
*hugs, Cat
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lovedly
Mon, 2021-04-19 12:57
hello cw thanks
your fine poetry.
and yes
your remarks equally
mine died when i was 29 or so
thank you
author commentlovedly
Thu, 2021-05-20 11:33
every time i read it
i cry a bit
being old
now i know its like winter
when old
we all mold
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