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Dactylic Alexandrines

Submitted by jane210660 on Tue, 2017-05-09 17:55

Time is a healer and softens the pain now I’ve lost all your loving charms.

Yet nothing consoles me when I remember, the warmth of your loving arms.             .                  

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jane210660

Wed, 2017-05-10 03:11

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I think the term Alexandrine refers to the hexameter ie the six feet per verse. I did a bit of research myself into it and found you can have iambic Alexandrines too.
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wesley snow

Fri, 2017-05-12 12:35

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"when I" remember seems to me to accent the "I". Otherwise a good go at it. Alexandrine is not so hard. Just one more foot, that's all. Any meter will do. You are correct, it is just hexameter. Pope wrote in this form a lot.

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weirdelf

Mon, 2017-07-03 06:48

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it's fine.
It does seem to me the last syllables of each line are stressed. That is bloody hard to avoid doing.

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