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D is for Depression

The wolves are at the door,
demanding more,
what do they need?
should i conceed?
I need time to breathe.

I don't want to hear what they want,
a piece of me knowing I can't.
give what they're asking for,
They always want more.

I want to forget the world,
escape from the cold,
with dignity,
and home spun empathy,
as a life of depravity and desolation unfolds.

take what you want,
even though the river has run dry.
let me contemplate,
making my escape,
wishing the sun never to rise.

I want hide in the shadows,
let the silence and dark hold me,
enfold me.
I don't want to see the world,
I don't want to feel the pain,
i want to shut it out,
do without,
never emerge again.

Turn off the sound,
bring on the clouds,
Shroud me from the light.
Lock the door here,
and for forever more,
just leave me alone,
I want to be on my own.

Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Last few words: 
In support of mental health week here is my poem about when I'm in the lonely pits of despair and I push people out of my life to protect them from being hit by the shrapnel.
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Comments

nice

Mario Vitale

The whoring for credits hasn't started yet mate so 10 out of 10 for style but minus several million for good thinking.

Promote yourself on your own damn profile! Nobody cares!

If you want happy smiles and a "beautiful heart" you are in the wrong neck of the woods. Because nothing here is shiny and happy. It's dark, it's grey and it's miserable and it's going to last you the rest of your life......

author comment

In my opinion perhaps Wolves are at the Door could be an appropriate title. I hope writing poetry to express your inner voice helps.
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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