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Cry

Sometimes you've got to break down crying about the bad things.
Cry about the queens and all the kings.
Cry about the baggage cry about the loss,
Cry about loosing you because loosing you cost.
Cry cause you know that you messed up.
Cry cause you have scares from that depression stump.
Cry cause you know you should run from this town.
Cry cause on the outside you smile but on the inside you frown.
Cry cause I need you to hold my hand.
Cry cause I'm falling and I'm afraid ill never land.
Cry cause for silence I quietly wait,
Cry cause all I get is a depressed fait.
Cry cause I left when I know I should have stayed.
Cry cause when you don't do much for a while you start to fade.
Cry cause sometimes you just need to be kissed.
Cry cause its these times you don't realize you'll be missed.

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A very nice piece we all need a good cry now and then.

Mario Vitale

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