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Critiquing poetry >>>>>>>>...... my views only may be

Submitted by lovedly on Wed, 2017-03-29 13:43

Critiquing poetry
Having read you critique on my work
then having read yours
and
the comments of two
WOW’s

They know what they say
but
I have a word too
permit me will you

There is nothing I or you have said or say
that has not been said before
nor what you compose today
will not be composed
I of that I amn't sure

but life repeats itself in cycles
you are just a spoke
as we all are too

But today as you seek a PhD
I only pray good victory for you

Pardon my gibbering
I as I have said before
ain't a poet at all

Wonder why folks read me
and my broken verse
coz maybe I amn't that useless
may be terse

Please pardon my unwarranted
discourse or silly verse
maybe it could be worse!
Hopefully, not lady poet....

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

weirdelf

Wed, 2017-03-29 22:02

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is the worst of your work.
Stephen Fry once said- "I can say this sentence and be confident it has never been uttered before in the history of human communication: 'Hold the newsreader's nose squarely, waiter, or friendly milk will countermand my trousers.'"

Originality is always possible. Meaning and quality are to some degree quantifiable.

You do so much better when you write of feeling and experience than of poetry. Please do, you are so much better than this, my dear.

cheers,
Jess
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lovedly

Thu, 2017-03-30 00:01

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Many cheers you are one
and one ONLY

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