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Crimson Squid of a Cimmerian Sea

Crimson Squid of a Cimmerian Sea,
You Hide Your Habitation
From us Voyeurs of Fields, to Vacate
A Society of Ambiverted Souls
For one of Solitary Folk,
Sparse From one Another, Free and Atypical.

With Caliginous Waters Circumjacent,
Your Negative Yolk Nauseates
Those Without a Tartarean Wittiness.
Covert Romantic Causes Repute
Of a Bitter, Obdurate Bohemian.
Though Sardonic, Truculent, and Sharp,
In Sombre Idiosyncrasy you Shock.

Peopling a Starry Pelagic Space,
Rebellious Cast, Rejecting Control,
You Challenge Your Contemporaries
With a Contending, Warring Constitution.
Withdrawn, Aberrant, Wry, Aggressive,
You are Irregular, Your Identity
Incoherent With Itself, you Wry
Scarlet Cephalopod of Sable Cosmos.

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looking forward to reading more of your work here!

my reading of e.e.cummings shows indiscriminate usage of capitalization and punctuation, and I found some of his "caution to the winds" approach to be disconcerting, and distracting to the poem I was reading.

Why Do You Use So Many capitals?

I like the addition of one line to each succeeding stanza. I think the first Stanza and third stanza go together more. The second stanza seems a bit out of place in this piece.

I am not a Creative Writing higher education sort. So, value my advice as much as you paid for it... Ha!

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The capitalization distinguishes the alliterative, major words of the poem from the minor words such as 'to', 'of', etc. It also highlights the alliteration. CSCS, YHYH, FVFV, etc.

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That says it.
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