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Creature

Submitted by lou on Wed, 2010-11-03 23:43

I'm a creature of many habits,
I defy definition, I refuse to be boxed in.
I'm unique , I'm quirky.

I'm a creature, I won't be told how to be.
You won't cage me.
I have autonomy .

I'm a creature, a member of humanity.
I live and breath,
And yet I reek of insanity.

I'm a creature, I'm free ,
I'm who ever I want to be,
I me

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

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judyanne

Thu, 2010-11-04 00:47

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some very minor points
'I refuse to be boxed in.' - is that what you meant?
- maybe 'i refuse to be labelled'?

'I won't be told how be'. - does it need a 'to' - 'how to be'?
'i live and breath' (breathe)

as i said - i really like this - especially the last four lines
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

lou

Thu, 2010-11-04 01:35

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Thank you typos are the Bain of my life

Lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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lou

Thu, 2010-11-04 10:58

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thanks

xxx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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mand

Thu, 2010-11-04 03:12

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I like the positivity and confidence this poem puts across.

It's a good way of thinking!

Well done Lou

Love Mand xxxxxxx

lou

Thu, 2010-11-04 11:01

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pitty in not able to maintain hat it.
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lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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lou

Thu, 2010-11-04 11:02

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ill change that

lou

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Ayaz Warith

Thu, 2010-11-04 06:53

A very simple and sleek form of poetry, Lou.
Regards
Ayaz

lou

Thu, 2010-11-04 11:03

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thanks

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scribbler

Thu, 2010-11-04 15:04

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Quite a strong statement of individuality. I think a comma between I and me in last line might help though.....stan

lou

Fri, 2010-11-05 00:40

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Merci

Lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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ziggy

Thu, 2010-11-04 15:36

louise hi, you got loads of input on this one lol
a strong write which I like, which reminds me of a
line from one of my own " I am a creature of habit"
I always like writes that remind me of one of my own
must chat soon ,,,ziggy , ps , i see your posting loads ,
...................zigs x

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

lou

Thu, 2010-11-04 17:07

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mate, come and chat

lou

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lou

Fri, 2010-11-05 01:52

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Shucks, thanks JayCee. I was trying to fool my self into confidence.

Love always Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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